Voronwe, each numbered question appears as 'Questions' (in the plural). Do you want to fix that?
Regarding Question 2 (enforceable right #4), I think the explanatory text is confusing, and the set up for the vote is confusing and unnecessary.
Re the explanatory text, I think there's no need to say 'this appears under enforceable rights,' because we're looking at it in enforceable rights. I would suggest:
This right is also listed in the unenforceable section (#21 below). There is a question of where it should appear, whether in enforceables, in unenforceables or in both sections, because admins have the power to split argumentative threads and send them to the Bike Racks, but we cannot force members to participate in a Bike Racks thread. Your choice here is to indicate if you want this right to appear in this (the enforceable rights) section. You will also vote below, to indicate whether you want this right to appear in the unenforceable section. You may vote to include this right in both sections, or you may vote to exclude it from both sections.
Regarding the vote set up (and referring to my suggestion above), I think there is no need to cloud the issue with a choice referrencing moving the right, since there is a separate vote in unenforceables. I would suggest (contingent upon the acceptance of the text suggested above):
PLEASE CHOOSE ONE:
A. I want this right to be listed here (under enforceable rights).
B. I do not want this right to be listed here (under enforceable rights).
Right #7, can you fix the text flow?
Regarding the text of right #10
10. To refrain from personal attacks or intentional insults that target another member's nationality, ethnicity, religion, native language, gender, age or sexual orientation, to remove any unintentional insults that target another member's nationality, ethnicity, religion, native language, gender, age or sexual orientation and to refrain from using a foreign language to conceal insults of this nature.
I would suggest:
10. To refrain from personal attacks or intentional insults that target another member's nationality, ethnicity, religion, native language, gender, age or sexual orientation, to remove unintentional insults of this nature, and to refrain from using a foreign language to conceal insults of this nature.
Note that there is an extra 'removed' in the text as it now appears for Question 5
C. I want the phrase, to remove any unintentional insults that target another member's nationality, ethnicity, religion, native language, gender, age or sexual orientation to be removed removed but wish to retain the phrase personal attacks.
Questions 6: Concerning the other clauses of ¶1, B.
Responbilities
This gave me a moment's confusion (because of the lettered choices above it), so I would suggest ¶1, B. Responsibilities be put in red on one line, thus:
Question 6: Concerning the other clauses of ¶1, B. Responsibilities
Regarding the wording of ¶2, is there any reason not to have the same construction as in ¶1, i.e.?
¶2: Rights and responsibilities that rest on the determination of all members to keep Board77 a pleasant place for all to post but are not enforceable by procedures and penalties outlined in the Charter (can you fix your blue color here, Voronwe?)
You have the Right:
18. To be treated with courtesy and respect by all posters regardless of their status and the responsibility to treat others likewise. etc.
I've checked it, and it works in all cases.
For #19., I suggested this earlier, perhaps it was overlooked?
19. The right to express one¹s thoughts on any topic, etc.
Should it be 'to express your thoughts ...'?