Honestly, I'm good with that statement up until the "It is wrong" part. Seriously feels like a lecture from mummy.
It is wrong to try to shift the responsibility for your own feelings of vulnerability to others by trying to keep them out of this forum if your concern is not in some way related to an awareness of questionable behavior on their part.
Couldn't there be a better way of wording this that doesn't sound so much like "
"
(emoticons used for ironic purposes)
I mean, when communicating with someone something they shouldn't do, telling them that they're wrong and using the word "You" comes across as very confrontational. Maybe something like....
It would be dangerous to try to shift the responsibility for personal feelings of vulnerability to others by trying to keep them out of this forum if the concern is not in some way related to an awareness of questionable behavior on their part.
Do you see what I mean, or am I not making any sense? I instinctively flinch away from all encompassing statements where someone says
"that is wrong!" like a commandment, and then goes on to address the audience as "
You," as if everyone reading is going to make that mistake and shame on them for doing so. My very first instinct upon reading that is
"fuck that! I'll decide for myself what I think is right and wrong and screw you for trying to force me into your version!" Which is pretty messed up, considering I agree with the version written. I just know that there are a lot of people who, like me, dig in their heels when someone else tries to tell them what is right and wrong and what they should think.
I would never ever in a million years agree to vote for the first version of the statement, while the second one I would have no problem with. It's just a change of a few words, and means the same thing, but the tone is completely different, and much more friendly.